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    dots Submission Name: My Maskdots
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    Author: Specialme
    ASL Info:    17 / female / Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 8/11/7
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 884
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1174



    Description:
       yeah i wrote this one day after reading lots of others peoples poems about their masks and wrote my own, plz comment
    and yeah this poem is true to me just so that you ppl know
    to me the last 2 paragraphs dont seem to make sense but it could just be me let me know what you think thanxs


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    dotsMy Maskdots
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    Smiles, laughter, jokes
    Can you tell its all a lie
    That this girl whose
    Life seems so perfect,

    Tall, skinny, blonde
    The personality to die for
    Always seems so strong
    And such a positive thinker

    Intelligent, social, hyper
    She could be something
    In her life, be successful
    And have a good life

    Can you tell its all a mask
    The make-up the clothes
    Everything is a lie
    For the real her, if only u knew

    Depressed, confused, lonely
    She hates her life and wants it to end
    Crying her self to sleep at night
    Wishing she wont wake up the next morning

    Her eyes look so happy but if
    Only you could see the pain
    For she is silently crying,
    Then maybe just maybe

    You can save her,
    Save her from herself,
    She has no hope and needs
    Someone else to be there for her

    She wants to tell people
    But she cant bring her self to say it
    So everyday is the same,
    Everyday she puts her mask on like a routine




    Submitted on 2007-12-12 01:14:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Great flow, almost sounds a song.
    Pointer, fully spell out words
    "For the real her, if only 'u' knew".
    I can actually cope with this poem,
    I mean, everyone has their own demons.
    Some more than others.
    It was really great, Ill go and read all your other now ^_^
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by Dark Divinity | [ Reply to This ]
      I can really understand this. I've been pretending to be someone I'm not for a long while now. in the end though it becomes too difficult, and the mask begins to crack. at that point you can get a new one, or be yourself, both equally unnerving. still though, I thought you put this very well, and it brought alot of memories back!
    | Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]
      I get your point. So you succeeded in explaining this but the verse seems kinda bleek. I don't know maybe it's the overall tone that makes this like any other poem on this site...
    | Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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