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    dots Submission Name: And Away We Godots
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    Author: gavinspikenard
    ASL Info:    20-something/m/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 273/334/104
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 188
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsAnd Away We Godots
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    With attentions erect to conformist facade
    We march, driven by forced respect
    Pretentious and jaded, no err tolerated,
    we won't leap from out of our sects

    Dictatorship pecks all our cheeks
    So we blush diplomatically

    Like lemmings and sheep,
    we'll form herds and lose sleep,
    and watch blankly as sowing is trashed by the reaping

    Militant Mother-Earth calls out our names
    and will claim what patterns are placed
    By the hour we toil to process turmoil
    but are certain to see that it's packaged in lace

    Religion ingestion has slaughtered the questions
    and given us answers so soft to the touch
    But man's methods are failing, we're forever sailing
    in mite-ridden ships, much like misshapen crutches




    Submitted on 2007-12-12 10:21:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel you, on the part of "But man's methods are failing, we're forever sailing in mite-ridden ships, much like misshapen crutches." Well described.
    | Posted on 2007-12-16 00:00:00 | by BahamutZer0 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is probably the most thought provoking and well thought out piece I've read on this site for a while. At some point you do get enough of all the love lost and pain endured kind of poems, and this was an interesting change.

    I have mixed feelings for the last stanza. I loved the first two lines, and then the last two seemed almost trite.

    still, this was very good, it sort of woke me up for a minute from my little world of daily nonsense work. so that in itself is quite amazing.
    | Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]



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