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    dots Submission Name: A reflected memorydots
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    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 503/510/143
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsA reflected memorydots
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    When all is quiet,
    a sombre moon would smile,
    briefly, beautifully - about this peace,
    The breeze follows a fragrance -
    some sleepy flowers would yawn,
    the gentleness of now, overwhelms her;

    Many years back when you arrived -
    leaving memories,
    those moments -
    leaving us - me and you,
    now,
    Could it be like that again?
    many questions, many semicolons,
    left behind, some around her soul's corner -
    wondering and thinking,
    songs they sang, jokes they laughed at -
    together,
    Could it be you were doing something else?
    where you played tricks,
    Could it be she was doing something else?
    where she just loved - unspoken;

    Slowly these dewdrops collect dreams,
    as night falls over a autumn- caressed land,
    Maybe you would remember - someday,
    a heart of yesterday,
    she may be waiting, sometimes hopelessly praying,
    in this world of no permanence.




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      This is lovely, with a peaceful, wistful, daydreamy mood about it! It entices the senses, and lulls one into a lover's misty dream!
    | Posted on 2008-01-21 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hi and thanx for another great comment
    you hav so many writes to choose from so i took the last one to read
    very nice as usual i alwaz seem to enjoy reading your thoughts
    i hope you and yours have a good xmas and all the best in 2008

    thanx again
    sandman
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is nice, it seems like a flow of creative advice, I really enjoyed reading it, nice work
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by Instep | [ Reply to This ]


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