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Walk Away


Author: skinnard
ASL Info:    22 male New York
Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 38 /76 /49
Words: 159
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Walk Away



I take one last look

Now I can never look again

I feel one last shiver

Now I can never call you friend

I give one last glance

As I watch you walk away

I take a deep breathe

As I hear the words you say

Feeling one last beat in my heart

My last moment of being whole

I watch as my life falls apart

While I just let you go

Im torturing my soul

And ripping out my heart

Nothing but a memory

Memories tearing me apart

Ive pushed you too far away

Cant imagine the distance between us

But I cant hide from the truth

What once was love, is only lust

I think one last time

How Ive feared this day

And crumble before you

As I watch you walk away




Submitted on 2007-12-12 19:24:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Great flow, nice balance.
Depressing, yet truthful.
Making me want to take a double look at my own life, to see how I've pushed people away.
I mean everyone has a breaking point; it’s just only how a person takes it. As I read you poems, I just wonder if you've seen these things. If you have lived through it. Or you are you just that creative and you are able think faster then write. So to continue, I really liked it. Hope to see more like this.
| Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by Dark Divinity | [ Reply to This ]


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