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    dots Submission Name: Walk Awaydots
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    Author: skinnard
    ASL Info:    22 male New York
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 38/76/49
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWalk Awaydots
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    I take one last look

    Now I can never look again

    I feel one last shiver

    Now I can never call you friend

    I give one last glance

    As I watch you walk away

    I take a deep breathe

    As I hear the words you say

    Feeling one last beat in my heart

    My last moment of being whole

    I watch as my life falls apart

    While I just let you go

    Im torturing my soul

    And ripping out my heart

    Nothing but a memory

    Memories tearing me apart

    Ive pushed you too far away

    Cant imagine the distance between us

    But I cant hide from the truth

    What once was love, is only lust

    I think one last time

    How Ive feared this day

    And crumble before you

    As I watch you walk away




    Submitted on 2007-12-12 19:24:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great flow, nice balance.
    Depressing, yet truthful.
    Making me want to take a double look at my own life, to see how I've pushed people away.
    I mean everyone has a breaking point; it’s just only how a person takes it. As I read you poems, I just wonder if you've seen these things. If you have lived through it. Or you are you just that creative and you are able think faster then write. So to continue, I really liked it. Hope to see more like this.
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by Dark Divinity | [ Reply to This ]


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