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    dots Submission Name: Give and Takedots

    Author: skinnard
    ASL Info:    22 male New York
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 38/76/49
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 677
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1025


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    dotsGive and Takedots

    Thief in the night

    The shadows melody

    Never saw it coming

    You've gained only pain with me

    I stay at a distance

    Assassin in the dark

    Yet pull you close to me

    And make you open your heart

    You're forced to be left open

    While my doors are always locked

    My love is a waste of your time

    My feelings are nothing but shot

    A give and take relationship

    I give you all my bullshit

    And take away your life

    The disease to make you sick

    Im the poison in your veins

    Source of all your tears

    Cause of your depression

    Demon to all of your fears

    Hammer to your shattered heart

    Your entire life will break

    I'm the worst mistake you've made

    Nothing more than give and take

    Submitted on 2007-12-12 19:25:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great flow,
    Made a short story in a poematic format.
    I really liked it for the romance, yet in which what haunts us. Almost like being sick, yet trying to strive, a person always gives their conscious beliefs, but the real deal is that people donít ever repay the guilt we feed off of. Great imagery, which played into this story of survival. I might be wrong, but poems are to the reader, and he then deciphers what the writer is trying to tell us. Itís a mid game in which you played well.

    In generalÖ.. I liked it ^_^
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by Dark Divinity | [ Reply to This ]

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