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    dots Submission Name: Insanity [unfinished]dots
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    Author: FarFromSanityy
    ASL Info:    15/F/look behind youuu.
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 52/76/34
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 811
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 753



    Description:
       ever feel like you're going insane?
    I sure do.


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    dotsInsanity [unfinished]dots
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    You've lost it all you can't go back
    How does it feel when your mind goes black?
    Such sinister thoughts for an ordinary girl
    Whose too twisted and morbid for this unfair world

    Inside you're screaming, in your heart lies a beast
    Your anger and tenseness is on what it will feast
    The drama titled lies and you are the star
    Go on and smile like the darling your fans think you are

    What's happening?
    Have you reached the point where you need to break?
    Is this thing we call reality getting too hard to face?
    Is your fear consuming you like you always knew it would?
    Are the voices confusing, not letting you do what you know you should?




    Submitted on 2007-12-12 20:28:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Not bad at all, great flow.
    Hope to see the finished project.
    It does show the true side of insanity.
    I am going to post one up soon, hope ya take a look at it. Well, send me a PM or something when ya finish it.
    I like how it is a story sort of, with the truths of voices breaking through, but like I've said because.
    A poem is to be judge by others and interoperated as something they see.
    Even though I see it differently, you might have a whole new scheme then I can see, great job, I really liked it.
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by Dark Divinity | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm... Not bad. The flow is nice,the rhyming is ok, the subject matter is a bit overused these days on eliteskills. Anyways considering your age this is a good poem. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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