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    Author: PrincessOfDark
    ASL Info:    17/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 22/31/25
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    My Feelings are betraying me
    I try to beileve
    In what my mother used to tell me
    That everything happens for a reason
    But that I cannot beileve
    I cannot beileve i was meant to be this sad
    That I was meant to feel this pain
    That my life was fated to be this way
    Everything is sliping through my fingers
    Just like sand
    Then it flows in the wind
    Traveling away from me
    Out of my grasp
    I will never reach it
    Even tough I try
    Okaa-sama, gomen nasai,
    I cannot beileve anymore
    I will miss the way the things you said
    Used to explain everything
    Even tough they never did




    Submitted on 2007-12-12 22:33:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is nice. I like the reference to trying to believe what your mother told you. You have some grammatical errors that don't quite make sense, though it is clear what your meaning is.
    | Posted on 2009-12-16 00:00:00 | by lechuga | [ Reply to This ]
      another good one i love the way you say things are like sand going through your fingers and i love the way you say it's also being taken away by the wind never to be reached... but just remember you can always get up and chase it and capture it again... because the wind has to stop sometime right?

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    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by Darc Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      i like how you explain your feeling and how with your words its just like my feelings
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by BlackBloodDrop | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i really thought this was good iv felt that way alot like things will never get better i still do becouse they seem to get worse and it never makes sence it never will its just some thing we have to deal with
    | Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by bleeding_words | [ Reply to This ]


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