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    dots Submission Name: Bang Bangdots

    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Society
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    dotsBang Bangdots

    it's the world we live in
    the world we die in
    the world we cry in
    over and over again
    is what this world could never be
    because of them
    the ones who make up this society
    that lives in never ending fears

    my friend you were left
    broken and bloody
    left dying in need
    as you leaned your head
    on those who couldn't walk away
    and turn the other cheek

    bang bang
    no time for goodbye
    they wouldn't let him
    they wouldn't let him
    he left his past
    to find a future
    but in the end it came back and bit her
    they couldn't let her live
    they couldn't let her live
    ... bang bang

    lit in the dark of the night
    lit as we remember
    lit as we cry for you
    and for all of the others
    is how i can keep you, no goodbye
    there wasn't time
    they ripped you away, this world contains
    no respect for those who are different

    pre-c. & c.

    she was my best friend
    he was a good man
    she was a good person
    he was my best friend
    (repeat until fade)

    Submitted on 2007-12-12 22:38:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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