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Submission Name: how i am dots

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Author:	jjd
ASL Info:	20/male/Griffin, Ga.
Elite Ratio:	2.18 - 20/78/34
Words:	34

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	1228
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	197

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how i am dots

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at morn-at noon-at twilight dim,
the love flows through the wind all over again,
and how i see her is how i am,
no matter what i say,
She'll be there intel the end!

Submitted on 2007-12-13 13:08:13 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  cool!! sooo sweet!!!
love,
~Liz~
| Posted on 2009-07-12 00:00:00 | by ShadowGaze | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this one, but I agree with Dismal, the last line didn't really flow all that well. Great work!
| Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
  Very sweet. Cute, and nicely flowing. Short and simple but well written.

Nice job ;)
| Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by bloo | [ Reply to This ]
  awww. cute..
But the last line doesnt really flow. like the rest of the poem did

~Carrie
| Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]

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