Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: how i amdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: jjd
    ASL Info:    20/male/Griffin, Ga.
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 20/78/34
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1320
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 197



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotshow i amdots
    -------------------------------------------


    at morn-at noon-at twilight dim,
    the love flows through the wind all over again,
    and how i see her is how i am,
    no matter what i say,
    She'll be there intel the end!




    Submitted on 2007-12-13 13:08:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      cool!! sooo sweet!!!
    love,
    ~Liz~
    | Posted on 2009-07-12 00:00:00 | by ShadowGaze | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this one, but I agree with Dismal, the last line didn't really flow all that well. Great work!
    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sweet. Cute, and nicely flowing. Short and simple but well written.

    Nice job ;)
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by bloo | [ Reply to This ]
      awww. cute..
    But the last line doesnt really flow. like the rest of the poem did

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    154363

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    True Death written by layDsayD
    Love written by saartha
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Push written by JanePlane
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    written by Daniel Barlow
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Carry written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Every..... written by jackz
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    Cover written by saartha
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Are not cheap (working title) written by rev.jpfadeproof
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry