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    Author: Instep
    Elite Ratio:    1.59 - 13/5/5
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
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    Venting Empty

    A dream is what you believe in when reality means nothing, the very word nothing constitutes that there is something, but fuck money , Iím in it for the love of life, the love of Christ.
    Look at this medicine stick, original architect, lost and found devil in flesh and never forget it,
    Itís sickening when your own kind makes you sick, where's the comradery no that you state you believe in,
    A slain lamb up here on the stand, standing in front of you, and I question you, is this what you thought happen?




    Submitted on 2007-12-13 13:21:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think you have put down some interesting thoughts,

    "A dream is what you believe in when reality means nothing, the very word nothing constitutes that there is something"

    "Itís sickening when your own kind makes you sick,"

    these two lines particularly struck a chord.

    maybe you could consider expanding this or putting it into a poem/sort story form. either way, thanks for the thoughts!
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]


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