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    dots Submission Name: Up in That Treedots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       i wrote this today in my first period, i really like it. i hope you do too. i wrote it for E.S.
    :)


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    dotsUp in That Treedots
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    What was that?
    I just did see...
    A snake?
    A Dragon?
    A part of me?
    It ran!
    It hid!
    Up in that tree!
    I looked up...
    and what did i see?
    in shock i said:
    "can it be?"
    holy moley
    talking cow
    it is my love
    Up in that tree
    Can you get it down for
    me?




    Submitted on 2007-12-13 13:39:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      o my!
    i must say that this is a very fun poem. the rhyming of it reminds me of one of those Sheal Silverstine poems. its quite wonderfuly random. koodles!
    maybe a little longer would be a little bit better. hmm.elborating can be a good thing but beware. it can also be a very bad thing. you know, too much of a good thing can be a very bad thing. the whole flow of the poem it quite nice. im not much of a fan for free verse or blank verse. so it made me very happy to read this because of its lack of both.

    koodles on the whole thing!



    annie!
    | Posted on 2007-12-25 00:00:00 | by annie smith | [ Reply to This ]


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