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    dots Submission Name: A Memorydots
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    Author: koolness
    ASL Info:    17/female/city of evil
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 80/106/56
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsA Memorydots
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    I remember when we were free,
    now it's your face that haunts me.
    I remember our very first kiss,
    we were afraid that we would miss.
    I remember your smile from ear-to-ear,
    what I would give to have you near.
    I remember just like it as yesturday,
    in my bed, neext to me, where you used to lay.
    Do you remeber me?
    Or am I a distant memory?




    Submitted on 2007-12-13 14:51:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      now this was quite nice! I really liked your attention to form and rhyme, in general, the whole piece was wistful and sweet and sad, and beautiful.
    I liked this!
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]


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