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    dots Submission Name: Happy lil starsdots
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    Author: koolness
    ASL Info:    17/female/city of evil
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 80/106/56
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       ok...lets not point out the obvious and tell me its too repetative...I KNOW!!!
    * i wrote this when i was at ma friends b-day party and we were laying on the ground lookin in da sky n we saw like 7 shootin stars.


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    dotsHappy lil starsdots
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    Twinkle, twinkle in the sky
    Twinkle, twinkle way up high
    Twinkle, twinkle shine so bright
    Twinkle, twinkle great ball of light
    Floating, floatin from the earth above
    Floating, floating tiny light we all love
    Floating, floating they wink at me
    Floating, floating looking so free




    Submitted on 2007-12-13 15:00:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well, I'm not exactly sure what kind of effect you were going for here. don't get me wrong, repetition can be a great thing, if used appropriately, its just that here I didn't see how it helped get any ind of point across, in fact I didn't understand if there really was a point at all to this.
    anyway, I don't mean to be unkind, I'm sure you've written better things!
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]


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