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    dots Submission Name: sleepingdots
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    Author: racconeyes
    ASL Info:    16/F/OK
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 40/55/40
    Words: 274
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
    Total Views: 74
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1920



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    dotssleepingdots
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    she fell into midnight blankets and powerful arms that overtook her weight and pulled her into a see of blankets

    and her eyes were open
    and her eyes were closed
    and her eyes were glued

    to the ceiling of mirrors and diamonds
    and shattered dreams

    and her eyes were glued
    and her eyes were open

    her eyelashes fluttered against a smile belonging to Morpheus
    her prince
    her king
    her lover and
    her friend.

    and he held her. close. too close. too far away to care.
    and he loved her.

    his beauty-full girl. his beatiful girl.

    clothed in white
    and veiled in hope
    and touched by the things
    only angels could make

    and her eyes were open
    and her eyes were closed

    and her eyes were shut
    but she didn't care
    and he loved it that way

    she blind. he deaf.
    their bodies twining like serpents in his dreams.
    their bodies twining like hands in her dreams.

    and all of it so true and real and there.

    so she stayed
    dreaming
    with him
    for him
    in his dreams.

    but they were all his dreams
    and when she woke up
    he was gone
    forever

    and he
    died
    without her
    to dream him up

    Prince Charming
    in a field of shadows.

    and she died
    without him
    to hold her in one

    both falling to pieces
    with the pinprick
    of a needle to
    wake her

    ( to break her
    heart )

    his sleeping beauty.
    his sleeping love.
    his sleeping.
    his—






    gone.




    Submitted on 2007-12-13 15:42:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was quite charming, I thought how it faded away at the end was a brilliant touch.
    overall the repetition and short stanzas had a wonderful lulling effect, and the description of what happened, only to find out that it will never be was really a good idea to go about this. it brought a whole new meaning to the word longing.
    anyway, as you can see, I really liked this.
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]



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