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    dots Submission Name: Uncanny Merchandisedots

    Author: marigold
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 182/203/89
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsUncanny Merchandisedots

    There once was a beggar who wandered on foot,
    and nothing he owned but his rags and a sack,
    that was empty and filled with a myriad holes,
    still he carried it lightly upon is bent back.

    To a town once he came and proclaimed in the square:
    "come and buy, come and buy my right wondrous wares"
    people laughed and threw stones, "what a fool!" so they jeered
    "all he has are the rags he is in, how he dares!"

    but he stood firm and ducked as the pebbles whizzed by
    and spoke proudly to all those assembled about
    "do you know, foolish townsmen, what lies in this sack?
    I will tell you, and then you will not idly shout.

    the voice of the sea-wind, the mute frown of death,
    the stare of Medusa, the poet's last sigh,
    the breath of a dragon, a maid's wistful glance,
    the smile of a dolphin, the infant's first cry"

    they stared and they stared, and still nobody dared
    to purchase these wares from quite exotic lands,
    but then with a small voice a child stepped forth,
    "the smile of a dolphin for a ring in my hands."

    Submitted on 2007-12-13 15:47:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That is soooooo cool , i barely get it , and im sorry for that , but your form is beautiful , and i love this , i didn't notice it rhymed until jus tthis second , being 6:50:50 pm eastern time , lol i read it 5 minited ago , love this ,

    "the smile of a dolphin for a ring in my hands."

    i don't get , explain to me please , thanks , and good thing here
    | Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]

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