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    dots Submission Name: Angels Love Devilsdots
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    Author: Razor2TheRosary
    ASL Info:    20 - f - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 215/98/41
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 231
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsAngels Love Devilsdots
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    Draping your dead skin across my mattress
    because you couldn't wear it anymore,
    you wrapped thirteen wires around my neck
    and calmly spit out the blood of a whore.

    Love swallows old memories drenched in bleach,
    burning holes in the back of it's throat to
    singe the smiles of forlorn majesties,
    while touching the butane ring around you.


    Gods were replaced by devils with angel
    wings, which had been disfigured long before
    dim multicolored lights could control you,
    but their shadows held a blinding allure.

    A church was built on the hill where pitchforks
    were not accepted unless they were blue,
    and I could never worship anything
    that didn't mutilate the ghost I knew.


    Tonight, I'll lick your flesh for the last time,
    chewing on organs that filled this disguise.
    Masochistic ruin reigns because lust
    always tastes sweeter when somebody dies.




    Submitted on 2007-12-14 00:48:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Now that was a great dark tale(smile) I have always liked your style of writing Nikki!
    This one takes us over the edge and then back again.
    I found no misstakes in this and as far as I'm conserned it was perfect. Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Such a way with words. The ever sadistic and gripping hold you have on your presentation of relationships ~ life ~ reality - never ceases my admiration of your writing within this genre.

    Lines - like em all, your last two send shivers up my spine ~ in a most tingling dark way ;)

    I require one explanation "A church was built on the hill where pitchforks
    were not accepted unless they were blue"
    Don't get me wrong, it hits me with my own thoughts and images, but I'm curious as to your meaning here...

    OHHHH...and the first 2 lines - seriously [censored]in'!
    I get such a vivid image with that - you have no idea...
    Again ~ another great write grasshopper!

    Lisa
    | Posted on 2007-12-15 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      First off, let me say that I'm -Highly- impressed by the way you mix archaic terms with 'new-world' objects to describe situations and people in this piece. I can't explain how it makes me feel, somewhat timeless perhaps? Either way, it reminds me of something dark and impersonal, cold, metallic yet something that everyone can identify with.

    Now then, there is no doubt in my mind that this piece was written much how almost all of my work is written. While under an emotional euphoria of either extreme anger/pain/solitude or absolute euphoria period.

    The piece itself is slightly hard to decipher, I suppose I may be too tired to interpret many of your metaphors.
    Though the general idea that I get is that you're wallowing in the past pain-pleasures of something that wouldn't work itself out. You're slightly smug about the fact that this will come to an end (as all things do) yet you absorb yourself in the sating albeit putrid rituals of this relationship.

    I must say, I'm very impressed with your attitude in general here. You don't candy coat anything here, it's strait facts. You don't explain that you enjoy these things or tiptoe around the fact that many people would find it offensive. It's as if your attitude in writing this actually reinforces the subject of the write itself:

    "Our Love/Sex/Relationship was and is pain, get over it"

    Simply gorgeous,
    -Christopher
    | Posted on 2007-12-14 00:00:00 | by SlanderousLust | [ Reply to This ]



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