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    dots Submission Name: Psycho Fitdots
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    Author: Dark Divinity
    ASL Info:    20 Male Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 23/20/8
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1329
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 906



    Description:
       Its sorta dark, but its what I think or feel when I am around people who piss me off hahaha


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    dotsPsycho Fitdots
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    From right,
    To the light.
    Weíre running out of time,
    To find our way out.

    You canít get a hold of this,
    Nor hold me back.
    I'll show you the path,
    And blood you wont quench.

    Youíre left in this box,
    Only feel these walls.
    Sometimes I wish you misplaced,
    To feel this release.

    You know you canít hide it,
    The beast you let go.
    And you psycho fit
    Is about to blow.

    Youíre going to keep getting it,
    Being pushed around.
    You canít handle this pain,
    A bullet sounds.

    Youíre happy
    Their dead.
    I tried to lend a hand,
    You ignored what I said.

    So now you pay the price,
    To keep it held.
    From reaching its zenith,
    I swear Iíve seen it.

    Only in myself.




    Submitted on 2007-12-14 08:04:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I Like this!!!!
    You know there is one word in this Poem that really sticks out and forces the reader to really think deeply
    Its the word ZENITH
    To me that word instantly made me think just how fast the violence and all the sexual inuendos on television are slowly destroying our youth
    There is violence everywhere and no matter where you turn the stupid damn media throws it right in your face
    Its no wonder our children our so screwed up in todays society
    Other then that your words truthfully show just how hard it is to be a teen in the world today
    I admire your courage for sharing this
    EXCELLENT WORK!!!

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-06-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      i like ur style it is the type of poetry u either relate to or u dont and thank u for ur comment
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by bleeding_words | [ Reply to This ]


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