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    dots Submission Name: Last Breathedots
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    Author: Dark Divinity
    ASL Info:    20 Male Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 23/20/8
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 996
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 543



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    dotsLast Breathedots
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    Heart filling pain
    Ripping at the seams.
    No longer can I hold
    In all these Dreams.

    Hold your breathe,
    Cover your eyes,
    Protect yourself
    From their lies.

    Their poison kills
    All those who attempt
    For free will.
    Not again, not anymore.

    Prepare yourself,
    For the fall.
    Only to see,
    Your back on the wall.

    Here it comes,
    One more time,
    You can’t even face it,
    Your own crime.




    Submitted on 2007-12-14 12:45:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was written very well. The rhyme was consistant, the flow was okay, but there wasn;t alot of emotion. Other than that it was really good. Keep up the nice work, and I'll keep reading

    »MIss MIsery«
    | Posted on 2007-12-15 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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