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    dots Submission Name: Hold Backdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHold Backdots
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    To you

    I thought I knew,
    What to say to you,
    When times got rough,
    Id push away from you,
    And you loved me,
    But no matter what Id do,
    You would hug me,
    And Id hold back/
    To you

    This is spoken,
    For those whove been in love,
    Who doubted the words,
    Theyd spoken of,
    But wound up loving them,
    And hated it, too,
    You would hug them,
    But theyd hold back/
    To you

    I had held back
    To someone, it barely hurt,
    But afterwards,
    The pain gets to work,
    The emotions of you, Lovely,
    Left me with a blue bruise
    You would hug me,
    But Id hold back/
    To you

    I regret it,
    Id love you freely now




    Submitted on 2007-12-14 12:54:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was so sweet, really. so many times we wish we'd not held back in the past, but then its too late, and the moments have slipped like sand through our fingers. this was really quite poignant, I enjoyed the form and structure as well as the message.
    | Posted on 2007-12-14 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]


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