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Kiss me


Author: rachel gless
ASL Info:    23/f/mx
Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 68 /89 /37
Words: 56
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Let me know what u think!


Kiss me



Kiss me

Kiss me red
Kiss me white
Kiss me tender
Kiss me wild

Hold me close
Don’t let go
Say you love me
Even more

Hold my hand
Watch me smile
Please move closer
Don’t stand by

Can’t you see?
I’m right here
Just stop thinking
And kiss me




Submitted on 2007-12-15 11:19:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the innocence and cuteness portrayed by the simplicity in which you wrote this piece. It is good and I don't have any complaints.

-Ethan
| Posted on 2007-12-16 00:00:00 | by Inkybro | [ Reply to This ]
  This was written very well. I could feel the love that radiated off this piece. I used to feel this way, it was nice. I'm glad you can enjoy. Keep up the awwsome work, and I'll keep reading

»MIss MIsery«
| Posted on 2007-12-15 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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