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    Author: marigold
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 182/203/89
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Ah! Never in strung syllables
    can strangest joys be sung,
    for ne'er with mortal accents are
    the twittering glass lights hung.

    The rumbling for afar, it seems
    to cloud with its machine-like sound,
    but such a choir of voices clear
    comes from the sea where music drowned.




    Submitted on 2007-12-15 13:19:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is very powerful for such a short poem! It is mysterious, and yet attractive in it's mystery! A suggestion for title "Where Music Drowned".
    | Posted on 2007-12-16 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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