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    dots Submission Name: Take me by my Handdots
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    Author: skinnard
    ASL Info:    22 male New York
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 38/76/49
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1018
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsTake me by my Handdots
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    Take me by my hand

    Dance the night away

    Forget about it all

    Forget about today

    As black as black can be

    As I stare into your eyes

    Fall in love with me

    With shivers down my spine

    Its a cold night outside

    But you have no idea

    The true meaning

    With a heart as cold as steel

    Be my broken angel

    So I can heal your wings

    Then pluck the feathers one by one

    And sit and watch you scream

    Be my guiding light

    That drags me into darkness

    I give you all of my love

    Now make me something heartless

    Peel away my skin

    And freeze that beating sensation

    Show me that you're the cure

    And lure me to temptation

    Lie to me, deceive me

    Continue on with your scam

    Be the reapers' accomplice

    And take me by my hand




    Submitted on 2007-12-15 17:46:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow this is absolutely breath taking i love this poem!! everything just flows soo amazingly..just amazing!!
    | Posted on 2008-01-03 00:00:00 | by JGo | [ Reply to This ]
      i like were it take me
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by BlackBloodDrop | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing word usage here. I like this alot!
    | Posted on 2007-12-16 00:00:00 | by shadows | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem makes me think of how love is, so often, the exact opposite of what you want it or expect it to be. So many contridictions...but we still want it and crave it. Great work.
    | Posted on 2007-12-15 00:00:00 | by Sparkster | [ Reply to This ]


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