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    dots Submission Name: always we fly, in rage and lust alikedots
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    Author: brokenmuse
    ASL Info:    26/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 756/734/161
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Misc/Passion
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    dotsalways we fly, in rage and lust alikedots
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    I held my breath
    as I bloodied my face
    with his remnants
    the copper garnet sliding
    like warm tears
    down the flushed ivory
    of my cheeks
    then I screamed into the wind
    howling wordless inarticulate echoes
    of savage loss and agony
    the cool blade extended
    from his unmoving torso
    brilliant carmine flowers made
    macabre bouquets in the feeble snowdrift
    as his blood froze
    upon my savage cheek




    Submitted on 2007-12-15 18:12:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was fantastic!
    Your imagery was vivid and it flowed really well.
    Every single word you use has a place; there is nothing missing, nothing that doesn't absolutely need to be there. I araely find this is works.

    Great job again!
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome work. A fave!
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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