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    dots Submission Name: Life Timesdots
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    Author: Jay92
    Elite Ratio:    1.33 - 6/12/16
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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    dotsLife Timesdots
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    Breathing in sips of your life
    It comes fore more
    Killing you slowly, softly
    Catches your hopes
    And drowns your dreams

    It enters your body without warning
    Making life seem dull, borring
    It moves against your will
    Swiftly taking the kill
    Plunging threw your heart
    It leaves your broken apart

    Controlling every aspect of you
    Wanting more and more
    Cutting into ever relationship
    Bleeding out the good

    Clouds the light
    Fogging it up
    Till its out of site
    Pushing you closer to the edge
    Ready to jump

    Scared, you hide
    Covering it up
    Putting the fake smile on
    It will never begone

    When it comes out its ugly
    Day after day your wonder
    How much more
    It booms in side like thunder
    It earitates like a sore

    You change
    This isn't you
    It most not be true
    Looking in the mirrow just pains you
    What have you become











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