Another,edit,but still. Like everybody esle,I reread my work. When I reread this though,I am ashamed. I wish I would've never wrote it,but,the fact is,I did. Nothing will ever change that and I'm sorry. It maybe be "poetically" wonderful,but it isn't right. When I wrote this,obiviously,I was very angry,very upset. You tend to say things you don't mean when you are upset. Everybody knows that. As ashamed of this writing as I am,I won't delete it. That's wrong also. This maybe a memorial of the wrong kind,but I'm going to make it one of God's. Let this be a lesson.
Eh,I wrote this teh other day.
I'm a little bit pissed...
Bout a guy...
A guy named JAKE HARRISS!!!?
Yea...Uh,I'm done now...
Hope yew like...I kinda like this one mehself...
So is my mind.
What do I need to do to get you to fucking realize?
Waking up into the dawn,
the sun will always burn out my eyes.
And my heart beats slower,
slower in time.
What can I do,
what can I say to you
to make you pay closer attention?!
I think I want to be alone.
I do believe that I deserve to be alone.
Look into my eyes,my pupils are dialated and shot to hell.
My urge to take you with me grows
just so you can burn as well!
Take that fucking vodka bottle and shove down your fucking throat!!
watch the alcohol float to the surface
as I make you realize that you're
without a purpose.
Just like me.
Don't think you're special,baby!
Cause you're JUST LIKE ME.
So read my stupid little nursery rhymes,
memorize them and take them to your grave.
Engrave them in your fucking skull!!
Just so you know,
Memory Lane isn't something that can be repaved
well the last line is really effin good...
it should be "shove it down". right? one thing is for sure; the reader definitely gets the sense that you're angry at someone. for what exactly is where things get a bit hazy. for me at least.
my guess would be that this Jake dude drinks to much and doesn't pay attention to you or something like that.
i can fo sho see this as lyrics...
i would say that in order for someone to get much from this other than the fact that you're pissed off, you would have to take it a bit deeper. explain the situation a little more in depth.
not tryin to be harsh. just ones thoughts, thats all.