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    dots Submission Name: I havedots
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    Author: metalman_21
    ASL Info:    17/m/NE
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 30/42/17
    Words: 348
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 1107
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2245



    Description:
       This is a song about high school, drugs, chicks, and all the shit that the 3 combine to make.


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    dotsI havedots
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    Chorus:
    I'm lost,
    but how are you today?
    I've been crossed.
    Have you ever felt this way?
    Have you ever been so annoyed,
    that you end up turnin paranoid?.....
    Well I have!

    Verse 1:
    I've been ditched again,
    by my old girlfriend.
    I just blow it off,
    cause I think it will never end.
    Then I get confused when she says goodbye.
    I wanna turn away.
    I need to get high,
    But I'm all out of sunshine.
    All out of caffeine.
    All out of time to fix the holes in my dreams.
    At the end of the day,
    I've usually gone mad.
    Have you ever felt like this?
    Well I have!

    (Chorus)

    Verse 2:
    I go back to school,
    to get this outta my head.
    I try not to dwell on how the pain will never end.
    But then I go and I find a new girl.
    Then I realize that,
    she's my world but,
    I'm all outta brains and,
    I'm all outta feelin.
    I'm all out of bait,
    to keep her on the reel-in.
    I start to go psycho,
    when i start to get mad.
    Have you ever felt like this?
    Well I have!

    Breakdown:
    I've been through so much shit in my life.
    I can't tell the difference.
    What is wrong and what is right.
    I don't think I can go one more sad night,
    knowing that I haven't pissed off,
    everyone in sight.
    O yea!

    (chrous)

    Verse 3:
    I'm lost again,
    in my own messed up head.
    It happens day to day.
    I think it's now a fuckin trend.
    I hope that this one dosn't say goodbye,
    cause i think it would be my last time gettin high,
    but i'm all out of sunshine.
    All out of caffeine.
    All out of time to fix the holes in my dreams.
    If you listen to this,
    and it makes you sad,
    then you have felt,
    the same way that I have!

    (keep repeating "All out of sunshine, all out of caffeine, w/ overlapping chorus)

    WELL I HAVE!




    Submitted on 2004-06-25 15:47:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked it also. It had good imagery and a lot of truths of teenage years that some/ most can relate too. I'm glad you like this site. You seem to flourish with you work and I like that. Ttyl.
    Broken
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by Broken heart dies | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it. It was very dramatic and i think it would sound good with music. It was a great song and I really enjoyed the reality it brought. Stuff like that happens to people all the time. Good write!
    Jan,
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by Jan | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this one...definetly a favourite. I can relate so much to this...teenage years are rough. Since I dont really know the beat of the song I dont have much feedback to offer, but it sounds alright to me:O)
    --Kayla
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this... since I'm in highschool it's very easy to relate too.. So much drama going in with breakups or getting a new bf or gf and people getting drunk all the time or doing drugs.. It's a messed up place. Really nice lyrics though.
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]


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