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    dots Submission Name: a plea for your touchdots

    Author: freeradical
    ASL Info:    22/feline/london
    Elite Ratio:    5.26 - 311/405/63
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsa plea for your touchdots

    the disarming realization
    that i want to be in your arms
    leaves me in stasis.

    i'm floundering in want
    and reaching out in need,
    i never thought begging
    would be so addictive,
    that i would humble myself.

    the way it hurts
    is something
    no master of torture
    could ever devise.

    i'll tell you anything you want to know.

    just please, please don't let go.

    when you touch me,
    a finger to my cheek in
    infinite gentleness,
    my heart flops around
    like a goldfish who can't breathe
    on the floor.

    (we have more than the three second memory
    in common)

    or when you kiss me
    say my name soft.

    you make me scream with need,
    without even touching me.

    i will die a small death for
    this obsession.

    and that is sweetness,
    in and of itself.

    i'm waiting for you,
    in my vintage slip.
    lips bitten
    and eyes hopeful.

    don't be late.

    Submitted on 2007-12-15 23:28:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is really good.

    I think (as if this is pertinent info here) that women have so many intimate sides. It took me awhile to figure that out. But yea, there is something to thinking about it and what it does to you. And something about wearing a vintage slip (I love them) that makes you feel womanly. Ya know? There is something about touch and letting a heart go. It took me forever to get with the fantasy of it all... but hell, just cause we are women, doesn't mean we don't have em too...

    just my silly thoughts... but I can relate.
    | Posted on 2007-12-16 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sitting here in amazement, utter shock, complete disbelief. .

    Reading this is like having your favorite band (who usually plays hardcore blast beats with insane breakdowns) play a country ballad.

    This piece, it's amazing, there's no doubt about that. . the way you space and pause leaving me wanting more is a testimonial that. But it's hardly you, I've never imagined you as one to write without a hint of satire or bitterness in your tone.

    I suppose we all have our 'other side' that writes in a way completely different from our usual motif, though I LOVED this piece I do hope it isn't the beginning of a 'blue period' for you.

    Still, it's a great piece of work, you've successfully shocked me.

    | Posted on 2007-12-16 00:00:00 | by SlanderousLust | [ Reply to This ]

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