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    dots Submission Name: when the sun went outdots
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    Author: D-Ink
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 81/59/58
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       i wrote this when i had uncertified emotions within me. i shared with you, hoping you'd like it. pls feel free to comment. peace


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    dotswhen the sun went outdots
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    when your insanity peaks in,
    we are in trouble.

    when your eyes are bright and sparkling,
    we tremble in fear.

    your speeches - both quiet and loud,
    sends danger signals in the air.

    your touch- incapable of emotions,
    lay awake at night.

    when we come face to face,
    we crumble; while you triumphed.

    your words - sharp as knife,
    always cutting us

    into shredded pieces,
    barely missing our targeted hearts.

    the day when the sun went out,
    we, the tattered ones

    marched solemly
    with sharpened thoughts and razor tongues.

    our minds took a turn -
    once a pink; now ashen black with red dashes

    is it any wonder
    how we manage to ride you down?

    slow and beautifully,
    painfully...

    the day the sun gone out
    we waited - silently.

    the time came- swiftly and abrubtly
    we delivered

    six feet under
    was your final abode

    a gaping mouth with silent cries
    were our present

    we watched, we smiled -
    mouths twisted in an agonized bliss

    - of vision.




    Submitted on 2007-12-16 00:35:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you did a really cool job writing this. i really enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]


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