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    Author: obaid
    ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148/93/34
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 977
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    Description:
       This is a poem I had written long back when I had to go through a lot of emotions because of a particular girl. I was just going through my diary the other day and I came across this poem...I don't even remember when I had written this...But i do remember WHY I had written this! Try and relate to it ppl!


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    A polite refusal
    To an obscene proposal.
    Amateur- you took me to be
    You saw infatuation but no love in me.

    My feelings for you withered away
    They came back and decided to stay...
    Nothing I said or did could make you love me
    You said:
    "How can you love me when you don't know me?"

    Isn't liking your simplicity knowing you enough?
    Isn't thinking about you every time-
    Mean I know you enough?
    Don't I feel your mirth and cry your tears
    That you say I don't know you enough?

    If it has to be so, then I guess I never loved you!
    I just loved someone-
    Who when I smiled smiled too!
    My love was undefined, immature, a perfect folly...
    And you were someone who didn't like me enough!
    Someone who defined love differently!




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