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Juliet...from the streets

Author: N0shin
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a part of life....

Juliet...from the streets

Just another story...just another thought..
and here i go..singing that love song again.
Been hours..been years..
and a several million heart beats,
that i saw your face...
But just a hopless Juliet..

You've been playing that guitar on alleys..
and i have loved you even more;
for those strings sing my tears
and every word from your lips kiss me goodbye..
It all comes more time..

New dress and a broken heart...
exactly how you left me standing..
and i've wondered from streets to sreets..
and i've counted till eternity...

Im only a Juliet from the streets..
Im just another song...
Im an old story...
Old record running new..
but romeo...would you ever find love..
as pristine and as beautiful?

Submitted on 2007-12-16 07:49:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is gorgeous!
seriously gorgeous!
i read this and cannot help but think of this being the dire straits song 'romeo and juliet' from juliets perspective

in the dire straits song starts

a love struck romeo
sings the street a serenade
laying everybody low
with a love song that he made
finds a street light and steps out of the shade
and says something like
"you and me babe, how about it?"

and all through the song its romeo pleading with juliet... rmemeber when we used to make love... i cant do anything but id do anything for you... its really quite a beautiful song.

and this is the opposite.
this is juliet appealing to romeo
and i really want it to be a song... i can almost hear it as a song.

| Posted on 2008-03-09 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  lovely poem. i digg and i feel the words mad true. I look forward to seeing more of ur poems.

| Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
  welcome to elite skills, and i do like this writing. i can really feel whats going on here in this piece, i like the romeo and juliet correlation too. keep writing!
| Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by LostInThougts | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem is really neat. i like how you wrote this! welcome to elite skills!
| Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]
  well...welcome to elite skills my love!
i always knew you had the poet in you... because a person who shares so much emotion with me when in front, she can never pick up a pencil and STOP WRITING...
i am not going to comment on the poem because i will tell you what i thought about it when i see you... just know that whatever you do or WRITE is "PRISTINE" AND "BEAUTIFUL" just like YOU!
| Posted on 2007-12-16 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]

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