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    dots Submission Name: KILLED BY THE UNdots

    Author: obaid
    ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148/93/34
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
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       I hate what America is doing in the name of "WAR AGAINST TERRORISM" 'cause it is one big fiasco full'o'lies. So this poem is my thoughts about this and it is dedicated to all the innocent who have suffered for no reason at all!

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    dotsKILLED BY THE UNdots

    I wish to feel at home no matter where I am.
    Call me brother regardless of my tan.
    My accent- to you is incomprehensible.
    But "friendship" is a word, in every language

    With arms open- please do greet me.
    Not with missiles and tanks- welcome me.
    Please succumb to my calls of PEACE...
    Not my mother's flesh but the scent of flowers-
    I wish to smell in the breeze!

    How did we end up like this at loggerheads?
    From a simple misunderstanding-
    To mountains of lying-
    Let's talk it out and stop all the deaths and the killing!

    It was just yesterday that i had allies-
    I responded to their needs and their cries.
    On the battlefield I am solitary-
    My company are the dead.
    Just took a bullet!
    Peace at last...To my true home i head!

    Submitted on 2007-12-16 08:10:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I understand what you're going for here, but I'm afraid I'm just too sore against politics to critique it fairly...
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
      Very powerful. I love the ending there, you concluded very well. You know I am looking for poems like this for a project of mine that the proceeds will go to charity are you interested?
    | Posted on 2007-12-16 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]

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