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    dots Submission Name: A Christmas Poem 2dots
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    Author: mugsy
    ASL Info:    68/M/Sooke/ B.C./Can.
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 138/106/35
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       a simple poem of the season.


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    dotsA Christmas Poem 2dots
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    The tiny Christmas tree
    Glimmering like a thousand
    Colored stars
    which seemed to wink and blink
    at each individual child
    With happiness instilled in
    their tiny breasts, and warmth from hot cocoa, they raised their wee voices
    in a carol
    It was at that moment,
    with tears in my eyes,
    I realized,
    there was hope,
    and it dwelt within the hearts
    of children....




    Submitted on 2007-12-16 13:55:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You poem exudes an innocence in children that we rarely see nowadays. They are more likely to smash your windows and nick the presents under the tree that you describe. And hot cocoa? Raiding their parents drinks cabinet more like. Idyllic as your piece sounds, it's hard to imagine in this day and age.
    Cheers
    A.C
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by Asakura Cowboy | [ Reply to This ]


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