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    dots Submission Name: and a good hard slap on my assdots
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    Author: freeradical
    ASL Info:    22/feline/london
    Elite Ratio:    5.26 - 311/405/63
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsand a good hard slap on my assdots
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    if you didn't make my heart ache
    more than you make my body twist
    and coil
    and burn

    this could probably work.

    say my name.

    not because i want to hear it,
    but because i want to make sure
    that you know it.

    if not by heart
    (you do nothing with heart)
    then with tongue.

    with fingers
    and mouth
    and a good hard slap
    on my ass.

    if you're not going to fuck off
    and leave me be
    i might as well get on,
    get off.

    forget that i don't matter to you,
    possession is nine tenths
    of the orgasm.

    forget menage a trois,
    handcuffs, melted wax,
    the way you murmur
    words,
    hot words that burn my ears
    and brand themselves
    on my brain,
    screaming daddy, begging for it,
    against the wall,
    over my head
    and under my skirt.

    the only fantasy in this situation,
    is the way
    i still stupidly believe
    you care.

    yeah, i will get out.
    i'm not waiting for you to roll over
    this time.

    i'll take me,
    my ridiculous mind
    my irreverent humour,
    my full lips
    and quick laugh.

    and the french lace panties
    that i know make you
    instant marble.

    i'll take those,
    and leave of my own accord.

    call me.
    (i won't pick up)




    Submitted on 2007-12-16 16:04:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ok this comment is cause
    1) i read it.
    2) i liked it.
    333) ...


    you paint sex (with words! word-paint, sex-paint, word-sex...ahem. amen.) as teetering on the brink of ... well on one side there's the physical- and the guy. on the other there's the emotional side- and the girl. And one has to get off the see-saw at some point in this relationship. the girl can't have the physical without fulfilling (or ignoring/fantasizing) the emotional.

    I'm being kind of cold and analytical in comparison, but it makes a lot of sense to me, why one can't exist without the other. why there's no such thing as just plain sex. why the title is so bitingly satirical.
    | Posted on 2008-03-03 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]
      [censored]in a. being a guy i despair for the dick who has you but dont know. he could be getting the ride of his [censored]in life just for doin a few basic things. then though i guess you wouldnt be this het up. swings and slap traps.

    despite the vivid use of language and the effect it has on me, you sum up the piece perfectly with this line:

    the only fantasy in this situation,
    is the way
    i still stupidly believe
    you care.

    still, this one is coming to bed with me tonight.
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by bugsy | [ Reply to This ]


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