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    dots Submission Name: Eyes Full of Nothingdots
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    Author: Sir Fusting
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 5/33/25
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       First poem in a few weeks, so I'm a little rusty. I'm interested in what you think. Thanks.

    -Dustin


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    dotsEyes Full of Nothingdots
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    Suck in the smoke, let it linger in your lung,
    Taste of the infinite, bleeding still on your tongue,
    Breathe out, waste gone to the air,
    Speak out, minds far past repair,
    Highlight your scars, make them known to me,
    Blame it on the stars, 'cause they're too high to reach,
    Eyes full of nothing, head full of drugs,
    Feed you the ego, you'll feed me the blood,
    Taste of the failures are too damn familiar,
    So suck in the smoke, let linger, the lies,
    Turn your head to the stars, eyes still on the prize.






    Submitted on 2007-12-16 23:39:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nicely done. I don't believe that you are rusty at all my friend...
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
      Good job. The 9th line threw me off a little, though. It seems out of place in an otherwise well organized work. But maybe that's just me.
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by Sparkster | [ Reply to This ]


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