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Be Happy

Author: Inkybro
ASL Info:    17/M/Oklahoma
Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 55 /69 /39
Words: 30
Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
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Be Happy

Sneak up on me
You filthy whore
You rotting bitch
Treat me bad
Abuse me
Make me sad
You've used me
Do it
I just want you
To be

Submitted on 2007-12-16 23:53:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Interesting anger. It kinda grabbed me with it's initial filth and suprised me with its ending.
Direct, and yet some rather subtle rhyming which makes for good contrast.
I like it.

| Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by Asakura Cowboy | [ Reply to This ]

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