I really enjoyed how you gave just enough details to string the reader on and still kept a haunting mystery to your tone in this write! It's always been kinda funny to me how the little, suttle things in our memories seem to stand out the most. Overall I think this is a great piece it expresses emotion, creates intrigue and remains, like most memories that fade into dreams, mysterious and nostalgic. Definitey a favorite!
1. Write a description. How can i say that this is a dream that you saw or you dreamt of someone in real.
2. The title could have been better. SAy "In dreams alive" ...etc however your taste is.
3. I am a sadist so this is the best line i find in the whole poem.
"The despair I find is whispering goodbye"
4. The last line sounds odd.
It could have been
a. And your face is all that I see.
b. your face is all I see......
I really like the imagry in this. I can still hear the quiet crunch of snow under your feet as you approach the tree you described in your poem. As I started reading this, I thought I was reading a romantic love poem that was going to have that sappy happy ending that usually shows up. I was actually suprised with you in the poem when this seemingly enchanted magic meeting did not have a happy ending. I thought this was a cool effect. Through the beginning of the poem I was sort of thinking "awww" and then at the end i was left feeling a resigned sadness. I don't know, maybe it's just my current mood that is causing me to have such a emotional reaction, but none the less it is a well written poem.