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Moving on

Author: rachel gless
ASL Info:    23/f/mx
Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 68 /89 /37
Words: 94
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Moving on

Moving on

I watch the silver sky
The color of my heart
I can’t pretend is right
That you’re still in my mind

You hunt me in my dreams
When I think I’m finally free
And even if I’m awake
You follow me everywhere

I can’t worry anymore
Stop torturing my thoughts
You chose to be on your own
And now enough's enough

Don’t know if it’s you or me
But I will not give in
Let go is now a must
Please follow your own road

Submitted on 2007-12-17 14:38:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was written very well. The flow was a little off and the imagery wasn't spectacular, but it was a very good write, with much potential. I know how you feel, I'm going through the same thing. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

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| Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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