Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password


Author: Inkybro
ASL Info:    17/M/Oklahoma
Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 55 /69 /39
Words: 48
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 1049
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 334


I wrote this using magnetic poetry on someone's refrigerator while I was heavily under the influence of alcohol (and feeling quite bad for being rude to someone who means a lot to me, as a result of being intoxicated).


Elaborate woman
My shadow and love
Like dreams you sing
And tell me you must
Pictures spray visions
I sweat it like rust
Now frantic it fiddles
Her weakness is crushed
A thousand say always
A light through the storm
Delicate and gorgeous
She did ask to soar

Submitted on 2007-12-17 14:51:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?