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    dots Submission Name: Encompassed Circumferencedots
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    Author: gavinspikenard
    ASL Info:    20-something/m/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 273/334/104
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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    dotsEncompassed Circumferencedots
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    Something is stored in me
    Soaring internally
    Seeking to find every last insecurity
    Screaming with hate to destroy self-esteem
    Roaring maliciously, burrowing deep
    Creeping and writhing along every fiber
    Being the creature that hunts the survivor
    Stuck in a gap with an unwelcome pet
    Drooling and slobbering, sobbing and wet
    Confusing to gaze upon, graze on and taste
    Amusing to think of, but a horror to face
    Your doubt is a cavern that breathes no emoting
    Faithlessness wraps you in darkness forboding




    Submitted on 2007-12-17 16:00:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This seemed very dark to me, but i like those. i love the short lines. They may be short, but they are powerful. the intensity you previal in your writing is something to be proud of. Keep writing i would love to read more peices
    | Posted on 2007-12-19 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]
      The first part breeds a strange form of poetic disgust--which is what I believe you may have been trying to convey. (it's a good disgust, if that makes sense.) And the last part, being the last two lines... powerful. I really like the rhyme scheme as well, the rhythm is almost sublime. Very nice work.
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]



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