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    dots Submission Name: Sleeping Pilldots
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    Author: Emerging Soul
    ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240/1114/244
    Words: 394
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsSleeping Pilldots
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    Sometimes I lie next to you
    And just let my body feel you
    You seem so large to me
    As I curl around you
    Resting my face against your back
    In the hollow between your shoulders
    I just lie there sometimes
    Just to hear you breathe
    A film of sweat forms upon our skin
    Building between us like a layer of glue
    Sticking us together everywhere we touch
    I run my fingertips down your arm
    And touch your hand
    Such a large hand
    Huge
    Nearly twice the size of mine
    I've been hurt by this hand before
    Simply because you don't know your own strength
    And my skin is so soft
    So easily bruised
    You have learned to be gentle...
    Unless I want you to be rough
    Then the pleasure from this hand
    Can be sweet torture
    My hand moves lower
    Down the curve of your hip
    And then around
    To where you stand already at attention
    Silky and hard beneath my fingertips
    Just the feel of my touch
    Has caused this
    And the power of this feeds my desire
    I can do this to you, still
    Even after all these years
    I move my hand upon you
    And feel you jerk beneath it
    Suddenly wanting nothing more
    Than to feel you with my tongue
    I peel myself away from you
    And feel the air chill my skin
    You shift to lie on your back
    And I feast
    I can feel the vibrato of your desire
    Knowing how you love this
    Knowing how you love me
    An incredible tenderness moves through me
    As you pull me up to your kiss
    I sheath you with my body
    Wanting desperately to be filled
    Wanting release from the slow burn inside of me
    Moving together, silently
    In instinctive tandem dance
    I control the pace
    And drive myself to peak
    You join me there
    And I can feel you
    Every movement every twitch
    I lie upon your chest
    Not wanting to move
    Then as things are wont to do
    It is over
    I shift slightly to the side
    And slide away
    I lie in the crook of your arm
    And listen to your heartbeat in my ear
    Your breathing deepens
    And I know you've fallen asleep
    Sometimes I lie next to you
    And just let my body feel you
    To sleep, perchance to dream
    Of you





    Submitted on 2004-06-25 17:27:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sleeping pill is not necessarily a title that suggests wild passion. but your poem was very passionate and sensual. very descriptitve and very well written. no criticism. great piece.
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, this kind of thing ought to be sensored. It is a very well written account of what you see a get from sex and desire. I have small hands myself, oh well. At least I'm not really small everywhere. ;) Very sensual. You nympho.
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok. Wow... Uhm... Mew... *blinks* A little... Ok... lets not talk about what it was written about...
    I like the style though ^.^ hehe... Very lovely style...
    Ah hell screw it!
    RAH! Sexual! *giggles* Very descriptive too which can be good or bad depending on the reader. I know some people don't mind it (like me) but others may not... yeah... -_-
    Anyways... Good job on writing it... very lovely... yep..
    -Alli
    (sorry about the er lack of comment o.O I was at a loss for words)
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]


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