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    dots Submission Name: dreamsdots
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    Author: franki jorge
    ASL Info:    19/f/ca
    Elite Ratio:    0.82 - 5/12/54
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 656
    Average Vote:    2.5000
    Bytes: 1066



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    dotsdreamsdots
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    my dreams cant explain
    where im going
    they dont show anything
    except me floating

    i wish i could stop them
    and ask directions
    its eating at me
    like an infection

    i want some hint
    of kind of hope
    instead of just falling
    down a long rope

    why are they so dark
    what did i do
    to deserve this hell
    they're putting me through

    i thought that maybe
    they would go away
    but now they haunt me
    still the same way

    sometimes crying
    sometimes death
    sometimes love
    and lots of meth

    at times there's a clock
    and it wont stop ringing
    it's always in my head
    loud and screaming

    there's a few where im falling
    and there's a rope
    but i cant hold on
    so i give up all hope

    i dont know what to do
    im struggling inside
    maybe some help
    will give me more time




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