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    dots Submission Name: Realismdots

    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1150
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    The world spins around so fast,
    we forget lessons taught in the past.
    We are free and we are true,
    the poor are beaten black and blue.

    technology has killed survival skills,
    reality replaced with cheap little thrills,
    gasses in the atmosphere fill our childrens lungs,
    then companys will sell them drugs.

    Look at the earth, burning more everyday,
    look at us ignoring what our scientists say.
    I just dont understand how we can cover our eyes,
    and continue to believe in political lies.

    We dont take any action,we never do,
    nothing new to me,nothing new to you,
    and we will continue our distruction,
    without fear of reprocution.

    So go ahead you dont care,
    pollute the water,distroy the air,
    kill it all burn all the trees,
    one day the earth will shake us off like fleas.

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      I love the last statement the earth will shake us off like fleas, the earth always has a way to cleanse itself and it will of us in do time.
    | Posted on 2010-06-03 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I was very impressed with this piece. I think a lot of people do care, but really who's gonna listen to us...
    I am glad you have taking a stand for what you care about. keep up the excellent work.
    You use your words well...I don't see that this piece needs any changes it's perfect the way it is unfortunately I can't say the same about our mother earth :(

    | Posted on 2010-04-07 00:00:00 | by Stargazer89 | [ Reply to This ]
      AWSOME, I always said the Earth will shake her flees. Nicely done and said. I really wouldn't change a thing. I'm glad someone finially stood up for MOTHER EARTH.
    By the way,,, I do CARE.

    blessed be

    | Posted on 2008-03-28 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]
      Straightforward, to the point, hard hitting and sadly true. You write with a righteous indignation that is needed for this kind of piece, and it comes through bold and clear.

    If I had to make recommendations, they would be:

    "Burning our earth, more everyday,
    as we ignore what our scientists say.
    And somehow we still cover our eyes,
    and continue to believe in political lies."

    Just a taste thing.

    The last stanza is ripping, full of that slowly despairing rage that seems to engulf those that do care. Though it feels at times like a preacher on a street corner, screaming that you'll burn in hell and somehow hoping that will convince you to listen.

    I might also:

    "So go ahead if you dont care,
    pollute the water and destroy the air,
    kill it all and burn all the trees,
    Just don't look surprised when we're brought to our knees
    And we shall fall from the dog like fleas"

    Anywho, I very much like this. Keep it up,

    James (aka eh8)

    | Posted on 2008-01-03 00:00:00 | by FallenGrace | [ Reply to This ]
       You have a role with your words. You made
    your point with your words. It was put put well.

    Hmmmmmmm Ya I liked it. But ya "Its The End Of The World As We Know It,.........But I Fell
    Fine"................."I Dont Mind"

    Ya Ha Ha.........

    Alright Late.
    | Posted on 2007-12-23 00:00:00 | by oononotthatguy | [ Reply to This ]
      THIS FLOWED AMAZINGLY, most poems seem forced, sometimes mine, but this flowed perfectly, there were no mishaps. And your lines are very uinique, some of them i would never have even thought of, great job^_^
    | Posted on 2007-12-19 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]
      I must say that I really liked this work of yours. I spend some of my time writing poems just like these, but you've captured the very core of the problem, and I really love that.

    Too bad we can't save the world anymore.

    Mother's so past saving, it's depressing.

    keep up all of the very good work

    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by Queen_of_spades | [ Reply to This ]
      "The world spins around so fast,
    we forget lessons taught in the past."

    I love this lines. They seem like something I would write. Anyway this is a good poem. The ending is great!
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it a lot it is a very eye opening poem to what society dose everyday without even thinking twice if we all just opend our eyes every once in a wile we would really see were just destroying our selfs
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by bleeding_words | [ Reply to This ]

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