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Let me....

Author: N0shin
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Exactly how i feel now...

Let me....

Let me not say that i think of u...
Let me not say that every breath of mine is for u...
Let me not offer u the roses and the lilacs..
Just let me come home to u....

Let me not say u r wonderful..
Let me not say how u make me smile...
Let me not make u cry ever..
Just let me touch u and feel your heart...

Let me show u the colours...
Let me love u under the wings of the angels..
Let me never make u cry...
And lets give love a million reasons to try..

Let me hear u...
Let me feel u...
Let me touch u..
And live once again..

Submitted on 2007-12-18 09:46:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a beautiful poem that you have written. The onliy thing I can say is that it is a poem, not a text message. Take the couple of extra miliseconds to actually write out the words "you" and "are." This would make it look more serious, personal, and professional. Other than that, great poem.
| Posted on 2007-12-19 00:00:00 | by lovedeathsdeath | [ Reply to This ]
  i let u...
"And lets give love a million reasons to try..."- the line that struck me the most!

u are the only poet that i love {pun intended}
| Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]

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