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    Author: gavinspikenard
    ASL Info:    20-something/m/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 273/334/104
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Eternal Guide and Friend above
    You make miracles happen in life

    I'm nothing that You should call on to lead
    I have no command, no voice, no plan
    I'm just not dependable, why would You send me?
    I'm no one that's special or mighty or savvy
    Though I cannot ignore Your grip on my heart
    Your tug, Your pull, Your grasp, Your cull
    The wood in my hand will one day be an icon
    The depth of Your glory condensed in a rod
    Masses behind me and Pharaoh pursuing
    But there's none that can bring down the promise of God

    My laud stands by parted water this time
    You make miracles happen in life




    Submitted on 2007-12-18 11:18:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like how you portray youself as moses, (i think right?) it seems to fit in perfectly with life. God always has a plan for us, and we have to get by obstacles everyday, like pharoh and the ocean, those were only some of moses' obstacles. ^_^
    | Posted on 2007-12-19 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]
      [oh, that Moses.] There is some definite, clarified relation I have to this piece. I like the repeated line about miracles--although there is something to be said about the miracle of life itself. Overall enjoyable, decent depth and unique phrasing.
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]



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