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    dots Submission Name: slander and defamation.dots
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    Author: freeradical
    ASL Info:    22/feline/london
    Elite Ratio:    5.26 - 311/405/63
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    let's play a little game,
    where i'll let you think
    you're the one
    in charge.

    that i don't know
    exactly
    what to say
    how to move
    when to moan
    to make you do as i please.

    you want me to fuck you up?
    take off your pants and
    show me how bad,
    how hard
    we both need it to be
    for this to work.

    for this to hurt.

    when i'm hot for you,
    i want you to call
    me your plaything
    hobbyhorse
    fucktoy
    dirty slut
    whatever.

    role reversal
    that you're not even aware
    you're a part of.

    other men's arms only feel good
    when i know it's killing you.

    so get rough with me,
    slap me up a bit,
    leave bitemarks
    and bruises.

    i'll be the one with a stranglehold
    on you heart
    by the end of this.




    Submitted on 2007-12-18 15:27:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I've been reading the poem teases you and (cough) mr. lusty over here been throwing at each other. And they are great in their sick and twisted humaness. I don't mean that in a bad way, mind you. I think that is what is so great about poetry...especially when people can play with a muse together.

    Have at it.

    They are definately a fun read.
    And this is way up there with stupid comments.
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      My shy and retiring rose these words have the delicasy of a firm slap across my smirking face. I do love the fact that you never choose to mince your words and the message glows like neon at midnight.

    I do believe my dear that in the next to last line you meant to say your rather than you...ah but I quibble.
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      Mmmmmmmm, I'm loving the title here.

    As for the rest, hehe, I think rather than a lengthy comment I'll respond in a more appropriate write.
    Less ambiguous, more tempting.
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by SlanderousLust | [ Reply to This ]


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