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    dots Submission Name: the ladderdots
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    Author: shmurr
    ASL Info:    18 / male / maine
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 34/129/128
    Words: 339
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       a song


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    over frozen lakes and mountain stone I will drag my heavy goal
    catching glimpses of divng sparks at the end of every road
    clawing toward a higher post than the one to which I知 bound
    looking up this same old ladder until I'm neath the ground

    oh, midnight seas and rocky shores, I've surely done my work
    but on rougher seas and further coasts I'll surely prove my worth
    I'll sail away toward a fire sun until the sun goes down
    at the bottom of an endless ladder until I'm neath the ground

    yes,I've piled a pile of shiny coins to needle through the clouds
    but in the cave there lies a diamond that'll truly make me proud
    a ringless finger on a ruby gem and the gleam of a golden crown
    looking up the same old ladder until I'm 'neath the ground

    to die without name or cause and to leave no thing behind
    I'll be a footprint on the ocean's floor or a mosquito in the tide
    so I'll steal the clock and from a mountaintop I'll whisper to the clouds
    at the bottom an endless ladder until I'm neath the ground

    when the winter clouds do separate and the gates are finally swung
    every dog will be cold and limp under the heat of the summer sun
    under sweeping rains and glassy skies I roam from town to town
    at the bottom of the same old ladder until I'm 'neath the ground

    and the letters that I meant to send will be stuck between my teeth
    and lodged inside my swollen throat will be the words I'll never speak
    if you see her soon, remember me tell her where I can be found
    at the bottom of the same old ladder until I知 創eath the ground

    yes, I値l be climbing toward a higher post than the one to which I知 bound
    at the bottom of the same old ladder
    until I知 創eath the ground
    until I知 創eath the ground




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      loved it...beautifully composed..looking forward to more of your poems...awesome job!
    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by N0shin | [ Reply to This ]


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