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    dots Submission Name: stone the loveslave.dots
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    Author: freeradical
    ASL Info:    22/feline/london
    Elite Ratio:    5.26 - 311/405/63
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsstone the loveslave.dots
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    i'm waiting for you.

    dripping
    wet.

    my hunger is so great
    i gnaw my wrist
    as my legs twist and clench
    of their own
    needy
    accord.

    my eyes are heavy lidded
    framed by
    a single tea light candle
    and the obnoxious
    city glow beneath me.

    uplighting me,
    a dirty massive artist
    seeing the glory
    of naked wanting.

    i'm waiting for you.

    hurry.




    Submitted on 2007-12-18 20:50:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm all for such free expression. Some like it quick and now we're looking for more.
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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