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Author: SlanderousLust
ASL Info:    21/Q/Four inches from you
Elite Ratio:    5.15 - 89 /137 /74
Words: 67
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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I'm anticipating you,
not only your body
but your mind,
your wit,
your attitude.

My fists clinch
in futile self-abhorrence
fickle self-destruction.
minute decisions,
and distrust.

I'd slay you,
remove your veil
of open love,
disintegrate the
that forces you to
feel as if actions mean nothing.

I'd love to fuck you,
but I'd rather perceive you.
Understand you,
fulfill you.

Submitted on 2007-12-18 22:05:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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